Analysis and Additional details to wish//forever

  

8/10/2023 - 11:43 PM

wish // forever

i wish now would last forever

i wish forever would come faster

i wished we would last forever

i wish forever lasted longer

i wish you could wait forever

i wish forever yon didn't have to

i wish i could see forever

i wish forever didn't blind me

i wish i'll be yours forever

i wish forever treats us kindly

Like I said before, i'm quite fond of this poem, so fond that I would like to dig deeper into why i like it, and what it means. 

 i wish now would last forever

i wish forever would come faster

Line 1: "now" the moment of writing the poem, it was a moment where i realized i was genuinely enjoying the grind and pushing in different directions. i noticed that i was doing all the things i was falling deeper in love with, and falling in love with all the things i was spending time doing.

Line 2: forever is the time we're to be together, the time where i'll be stable and things will be slower, it's a time of peace and stability, very different from "now" but equally as loved. it's basically the future

i wished we would last forever

i wish forever lasted longer

Line 1: it's pretty obvious. wishing is futile, and we all know the consequences of us having had been together, but again, empty wishes hurt nobody. in my head, everything - good or bad - would have been better with you around.

linguistically, this is the only line that started with "i wished" instead of "i wish", i didn't plan starting each line with "i wish", but honestly, i see no harm in breaking the pattern. The alternative to it would be:

{i wish we lasted forever}

which shifts the sentence's tension from beginning and end to only the ending half (or a similar, very awkward stress pattern that does not roll off the tongue easily)

Line 2: "forever" here is the forever that we lasted for, which really wasn't forever...

i wish you could wait forever

i wish forever yon didn't have to

Line 1: this one is quite controversial, i think. It sounds horribly wrong but in reality it's just selfish. There's just so much i want to get done in the next few years, and rational thinking tells me such a big commitment would only drag me down. Not only that, but the fear of the whole procedure makes me just want to push and push and push away the deadline, postponing my happiness for the sake of my sanity.

Line 2: this is the redemption line to the one before it, see just because i want to get things done doesn't mean that i can't achieve other goals in the process. And further rational thinking says that it wouldn't be much of a hinderance to actually go for it. so here i'm wishing that you don't have to wait forever, for two reasons:

1. i wish i could get it done with now.

2. i hope nothing horrible happens and we get nothing done, making the wait literally eternal.

i wish i could see forever

i wish forever didn't blind me

Line 1: this line was originally "i wish i could read forever" which makes more sense, but also less sense. Basically i'm saying i wish i could predict what forever looked like

Line 2: here i'm wishing that ever time i tried to predict or perceive what forever looked like, that i wouldn't get "blinded". the word "blinded" goes really well with "see" from the last line, but also it shows how difficult it is to look into the future. (also, kinda corny, but it's because the future is so bright, it bli- nvm that's too corny)

i wish i'll be yours forever

i wish forever treats us kindly

Line 1 & 2: finally some straightforward lines in a poem written by bash

{further notes: i know the last post was too long ago, but getting the scans done for the newer poems is quite tedious, also the quality of my writing deteriorated after the last post, so did the quantity of poems, so you'll have to be patient}